Desperateamateurs190217maryjaynnreturnsx Better Exclusive 【TOP-RATED · OVERVIEW】

| Issue | Fix | |-------|-----| | | Break long sentences (>25 words) into two. Replace “due to the fact that” → “because”. | | Passive voice | Convert “The experiment was conducted by us” → “We conducted the experiment”. | | Jargon overload | Keep domain‑specific terms, but add a brief definition on first use. | | Vague qualifiers | Replace “some” or “many” with precise numbers or percentages. | | Redundancy | Eliminate duplicate information (e.g., restating the same result in both Results and Discussion). |